The Western Reserve Writers Conference

Western Reserve Writers Conference 2017

Introduction

I attended the 34th annual Western Reserve Writers Conference on September 23, 2017. It was located at the South Euclid-Lyndhurst branch of the Cuyahoga County Public Library at the William N. Skirball writer’s center which is located at the branch. It was a one-day event with an introduction, a keynote speaker, three breakout sessions, and one first page critique panel.

Link to Cuyahoga County Library website

https://www.cuyahogalibrary.org/

Summary – Keynote Speaker

The day began in the large meeting room which had space for over 100 attendees and the tables for the presenter’s book sale. We were first welcomed by Laurie Kincer, the librarian for the writer’s center, and then by Deanna R. Adams, the conference coordinator. They detailed how the Western Reserve Writers Conference would proceed. The keynote speaker, Brian A. Klems, was introduced. He is a senior online editor for WritersDigest.com. Brian wrote the parenting guide for fathers called Oh Boy, You’re Having a Girl. He had ten suggestions for all aspiring writers from the experience of an editor.

  1. Write a great typo-free story with a protagonist with well-defined goals, a believable setting, and use the active voice.
  2. Get to know the editors and agents before you pitch them.
  3. Follow specific submission guidelines for each submission completed.
  4. Write a great query letter.
  5. Have a well-established author’s platform with a website, a twitter account, and a Facebook account.
  6. Network with others with the primary objective to be useful and helpful.
  7. Embrace any feedback that you receive and don’t let criticism get to you.
  8. Strive to be the easiest person to work with.
  9. Have more than one idea going into a pitch. You never know which idea will be the one that is successful
  10. Stay positive and be excited about your story.

He was humorous and engaging. He stalked the stage and had to hurry to finish his ten points because he was running out of time since there was too much to cover in the time allotted.

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This is the Goodreads link to Oh Boy, You’re Having a Girl by Brian Klems.

https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/16219954-oh-boy-you-re-having-a-girl

Summary – Public Speaking for Writers

The first session that I attended was given by Ray McNiece called Public Speaking for Writers. The presentation seeks to teach the attendees about simple techniques to improve reading your work to a live audience. He is a poet, performer, educator, speaker, actor, musician, singer, and writer. He first asked everyone in the audience why they choose to come to this talk and what they wanted to get out of the talk.

The first thing to do as a performer is to find a sweet spot for speaking where the audience is accessible and your voice can project throughout the area. Confidence is important because if you believe in yourself then the audience will believe you. Projecting your voice is important because you want the audience to hear and understand you. Take a full deep breath from your belly button to help in projecting your voice. Gestures are important because it helps the audience to understand what you are saying and what is important. This was an interactive presentation.

My contribution was to demonstrate gestures by repeating “howdy folks” and using gestures. Memorization of the material helps in engaging the audience. The whole group participated in memorizing and reciting a poem. We incorporated all the techniques described. The Poem was by Langston Hughes.

I loved my friend.

He went away from me.

There is nothing more to say.

The poem ends,

Soft as it began—

I loved my friend.

Ray McNiece is an engaging teacher and performer. I enjoyed his presentation and was glad that I was a participant.

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This is the Goodreads link to Our Way of Life by Ray McNiece.

https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/3205163-our-way-of-life

Summary – Agents

The second presentation I attended was Agents: When you need one When you don’t by Deanna R. Adams. To answer the question of do you need an agent, you should first ask what do you want to do with your book. Self-publishing authors do not need agents. Many publishers do not accept unsolicited submissions so if your goal is to be traditionally published then you need an agent to present your work to the publishers.

Agents bring credibility and are able to negotiate a better contract for rights and for more money. Agents must be pitched your work by using a great query letter. She gave examples from the Writer’s Market from 2013. The query letter has four parts. Start with stating your book title, your genre, and your word count. Next, give examples of similar books and why yours is different than any other book. Repeat your title. End with a simple closing.

She gave the audience ten minutes to write an example query letter and a few audience members read their efforts out loud.

It is important to define the genre of the book. It must be a specific story to be sold accordingly. The voice and tone of the query letter should match the novel pitched. The query letter sells the novel so only put in your biographical material if it is relevant. The main thing in writing a query letter is that the agents want to know what the book is about.

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This is the Goodreads link to The Writer’s GPS by Deanna Adams.

https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/27810622-the-writer-s-gps

Summary – First Page Critique

Next was a First Page Critique by panelists Brian A. Klems, Denna R. Adams, and Claire McMillan. At check-in, the conference attendees could submit the first page of their work in progress. The paper had a title and genre but no name attached. Pages were randomly chosen, read aloud, and the panelists raised their hand to stop the reading. They gave their reasons at that time. Twelve pages were read but only four of the pages were completely read. The comments were interesting for all the writes in the audience. The panelists ended with their dos and don’ts.

Do bring a strong hook, have the main character named, use the five senses, know the era of the story or setting, begin the story problem or conflict, and end the page with a moment of intrigue.

Don’t start with dialogue, don’t start with the setting before the character, don’t open without action, Don’t start with a prologue, and don’t use flashbacks.

Summary – Writing and the law

The third session that I attended was Don’t get fooled again with Steve Grant. Steve Grant is an intellectual property attorney. This talk was about how to deal with the traditional publishing world and how to safeguard yourself from unscrupulous companies in the self-publishing world. The copyright act of 1976 establishes that as soon as a work is fixed in a tangible medium then the work is copyrighted. Everything is owned by somebody. Your writing is owned by you unless it is a work for hire. A work for hire is when an employee writes something in the course of their work or when someone freelances a work. Remember that a contract is made to be broken so put language into the contract detailing consequences if the contract is broken.

Conclusion

In conclusion, I enjoyed all the presentations at the Western Reserve Writers Conference 2017. I thought that the first-page critique was a good concept and hope that it is used again at next year’s conference. I will be sure to attend next year.

Links

I attended the Indie Author Day on October 14, 2017, at the South Euclid-Lyndhurst branch of the Cuyahoga County Public Library in South Euclid, Ohio. This is the link to my recap.

Cibola Burn by James S. A. Corey

Cibola Burn by James S.A. Corey, Book #4 of the Expanse Series

Introduction

After a thousand worlds were opened up by James Holden in Abaddon’s Gate everyone wants to be the first to claim the richest world possible. Belters, Martians, and people of the UN take any ship that they can find to leave the solar system. This novel, Cibola Burn, is about one particular world where refugees from Ganymede and a corporation with UN land rites called the Royal Charter Energy (RCE) come into conflict. James Holden is brought in to negotiate their claims but none of them are prepared for the consequences of waking up a planet after a billion years asleep that was created by the entities that sent the protomolecule to the solar system.

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Summary

This novel has four Point of View characters plus a fifth called the investigator.

Basia Merton is one of the Ganymede refugees that came to Ilus to escape the destruction of Ganymede. He is part of a sabotage plan upon the RCE who came to take over the planet which they call New Terra. The RCE has a charter from the UN to explore and develop the planet. The refugees are not recognized by the RCE. The refugees want to destroy the RCE colony ship, Edward Israel, but Basia has reservations at the last minute. An RCE shuttle is destroyed which kills the provisional governor and leaves a scientific team stranded. Adolphus Mutry, the leader of the colony ship’s security detail, comes down to the planet and takes charge. Basia gets involved in a plot against him.

Elvi Okoye is a scientist, an exozoologist, on the RCI team that wants to explore the planet. She is stranded with the rest of the scientific team.

Dimitri Havelock is a security officer on the colony ship. He was the partner of Miller on Ceres employed by the Star Helix security firm. Now he is employed by RCI and is the head of active security on the ship while Murtry is on the planet.

James Holden is the only character who has previously been a Point of View character in the series. After the shuttle is destroyed Chrisjen Avasarala, the UN Secretary-General, convinces Holden to go to the planet and serve as a negotiator. Since this is the first case where conflict among the new worlds has developed, she wants an impartial person to negotiate a solution.

The Investigator viewpoint’s purpose is unclear until the end of the novel where it is explained.

Review

This novel is very good and I would recommend it for readers of the series but there were some curious plot choices made in the novel. I liked that this novel focused on a more constrictive story compared to the solar system wide stories of the previous novels. It was interesting seeing Holden, the man of action, attempting to play the negotiator. The character of Basia was suitably conflicted. He mixed the story of Ganymede with his complicity in the plot to hurt the RCE members. Another aspect was finding the courage to let his daughter Felcia choose her own path. He also decided to help the Rocinante crew when he was presented with the chance to do so.

Recommendation

I’m not sure where the arc for Elvi was supposed to go. She starts out with a schoolgirl crush on Holden. I thought maybe she would have put Holden in a compromising position. That could have been interesting but the whole idea was dropped suddenly. I don’t understand why Havelock was brought back as a character. His arc didn’t have anything to do with him being a partner to Miller. He was dropped into this story randomly. Security officer Carlos “Bull” c de Baca was a character from Abaddon’s Gate. If Bull’s name was substituted for Havelock’s name then I don’t think that any of the plot elements would have been changed. That tells me that Havelock was not an essential character.  I did like his interaction with Naomi at the end of the novel. The novel, Cibola Burn, was another enjoyable read and I intend to read the next novel in the series, Nemesis Games, soon.

Links

Link to Goodreads page for Cibola Burn

https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/18656030-cibola-burn

Link to my review of Abaddon’s Gate Book #3 of The Expanse

Ready Player One by Ernest Cline

Ready Player One

Introduction

Wade Watts is finishing his last year of high school. He’s poor and has no prospects. His parents are dead and he lives with his junkie aunt in a trailer park. The year is 2044. The seas have risen and the displaced people including Wade are crammed into high-rise trailer parks. The only way out is to win a contest for a billionaire’s fortune. The contest started five years ago but no one has won it yet, so Wade is determined to win it to secure his future.

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Summary – Halliday

The contest was created by the eccentric co-creator of the OASIS, James Halliday. The OASIS is a virtual reality system using a Wi-Fi unit, glasses, and gloves. Halliday’s company called Gregarious Simulation Systems (GSS) builds the units and distributes them for free to everyone in the world. The company makes money through paid add-ons. The OASIS provides education, entertainment, and jobs to the masses. All school classes are held in virtual classrooms.

When Halliday dies the contest is opened. The first person who solves his three riddles and completes the three gates will collect his entire fortune. The clues started in a video that Halliday had posted after his death. Halliday loved the 80s since it was the time of his youth. He fixated on classic video games, sci-fi and fantasy novels, and movies.

Summary – Gunters

The people who studied the era to win the contest were called gunters. After five years of many people trying and not solving the first riddle, only the gunters still attempted to solve the contest. Wade is one of those gunters under his username of Parzival. His best friend in OASIS, who he has never seen in real life, is called Aech and they share knowledge of everything about the 80s. Wade’s crush is on a girl who he knows as Art3mis. The gunters try to win the contest singly or in a clan.

Things change when a corporation called IOI is formed to specifically win the contest. They want to use the fortune to take over OASIS and make it a paid platform. The gunters hate this and call the corporation sixers. Wade and his friends vow to win the contest before the sixers can win to preserve the OASIS as they know it. It will be difficult because the sixers have the money and will do anything to win.

Recommendation

Ready Player One is a great book. I cannot give this novel an unbiased review. I was hooked when The Tomb of Horrors became important to solving the first puzzle. The Tomb of Horrors, which was published in 1978, is a module for the Advanced Dungeons and Dragons game. Advanced Dungeons and Dragons is a paper, pen, and dice roleplaying game that came out in the late 70s and early 80s. I remember playing that module as a dungeon master in 1983. Other media that is featured in the puzzles include Zork, a text-based computer game, The Dungeons of Daggorath, a role-playing video game, Black Tiger, a hack and slash arcade game, and Joust, a multiplayer video game. Movies used in the contest were Wargames, Bladerunner, and Monty Python and the Holy Grail. The album by the band Rush called 2112 from 1976 was also important.

The author weaves the 80s nostalgia throughout the book. I liked the kids and their mission. There were very few missteps in my opinion. There were too many info dumps early in the book. It provided important information but stopped the plot. Having a corporate evil antagonist was cliché like the government in the movie E. T. I felt that there should have been a further reveal for Art3mis at the end of the novel. It was a missed opportunity.

Other Media Connections

Other computer games that I think would fit in with Ready Player One are the Space Quest series by Sierra Games and Wizardry, which seems like a computer game version of the Dungeons of Daggorath. Video games that I liked from that time were Double Dragon, Galaga, Gauntlet, Dragon’s Lair, and Space Ace. I think that the music of Blue Oyster Cult would have fit more with the theme of the book, especially the songs about the Imaginos concept.

This picture has some of my memorabilia that is featured in Ready Player One. They are The Tomb of Horrors module for Advanced Dungeons and Dragons, the record album by the band Rush called 2112, and my VHS copy of the Monty Python and the Holy Grail.

Links

Link to Goodreads page for Ready Player One

https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/9969571-ready-player-one

Link to review of Armada by Ernest Cline

Writing Progress Report September 2017

Writing Progress Report September 2017

This is my Writing Progress Report September 2017.

At the park for a Labor Day picnic.

Writing Progress from August 2017

I wrote seven blog posts for garydavidgillen.com including my writing progress report for August 2017 linked below.

Finished Chapter 14 of Assassin in New Marl City

Wrote Chapter 22 of Assassin in New Marl City

Started Chapter 27 of Assassin in New Marl City

The stories 4 Humours, Space Station Sunyata, Grognard, and LARP Film Noir have been submitted to magazines.

Started using the program Grammarly to check the grammar of my stories.

Statistics of magazine submissions since December 2016 are; 4 different stories submitted a total of 13 times with 0 accepted, 3 pending, and 10 rejections.

Events from August 2017

Attended the Confluence Conference on August 5, 2017, at the Airport Sheraton in Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania.

The link to the Confluence website.

http://parsec-sff.org/confluence/

Writing Goals for September 2017

Continue to work on An Assassin in New Marl City. I want to expand the novel from 20 chapters to 36 chapters (100000 words total). Expand Chapter 27, expand Chapter 28, write Chapter 10 and write Chapter 17 of the novel this month.

Type the Edits for Chapters 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 15, 16, 18, 20, 24, and 26 of Assassin in New Marl City.

Polish and submit the stories White Bracer, Mage Squad, Time Traveller One, Prisoner of Tarnal, Kay-Eye, and Get to the Point for submission to short fiction magazines.

Submit 4 Humors, Space Station Sunyata, Grognard, and LARP Film Noir to other short fiction magazines.

Planned Events for September 2017

Attend the Western Reserve Writers Conference on September 23, 2017, at the Cuyahoga County Public Library in Lyndhurst, Ohio

This is the link to the Cuyahoga County Library.

https://www.cuyahogalibrary.org/

This is the link to the writer’s center at the library branch.

https://www.cuyahogalibrary.org/Services/William-N-Skirball-Writers-Center.aspx

Purchase an e-book cover for Assassin in New Marl City from Fiveer.

Put the first ten chapters of Assassin in New Marl City into the writing program called Scrivener.

Work on completing a Query letter to use to find an agent for Assassin in New Marl.